三、【第三種】是第二種的一種變式
1. 疑問句或反問句(推薦后者,語氣更強(qiáng)。比如:Doesn’t it…?)
2 講故事
3 觀點(diǎn)
【注意】:
2和3都一樣,加上1,目的是:讓讀者感覺到你的調(diào)皮、淘氣與可愛,讓文章不至于那么死板,特別是對于已經(jīng)比較boring的raters,這是一種從感情上拿分的方式!
Eg:請自己通過下面這段話找出issue是什么
Could the bad old days of economic decline be about to return? Since OPEC agreed to supply-cuts in March, the price of crude oil has jumped to almost $26 a barrel, up from less than $10 last December. This near-tripling of oil prices calls up scary memories of the 1973 oil shock, when prices quadrupled, and 1979-80, when they also almost tripled. Both previous shocks resulted in double-digit inflation and global economic decline. So where are the headlines warning of gloom and doom this time?
Issue:石油漲價(jià)是否會導(dǎo)致經(jīng)濟(jì)衰退?
可見,這段話是方向清楚的。
Eg:學(xué)生練習(xí)——請分別用三種開頭方式寫一遍
"A powerful business leader has far more opportunity to influence the course of a community or a nation than does any government official. " Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above
(我的):
第一種:很好
The author argues that a leader of great ability can affect the operation of a society or a country more widely and deeply. Suppose that in a society filled with this conception, the public will ignore the function and effect of government, then gov’s work will lose support and even be intervered , thus losing proper control of some bad things: free ride, speculation, etc, which cannot be malpulated by business org. Thus, I hold that it is equally important…
第二種:
J, a powerful leader of corp K——the chief client of the estate company P, had less effect on the control of P’s vicious violation of ethic rules: heavy speculation than the intervene of gov. In 1990, the boom of P, P took advantage of this prime period to induce miracle amount of foreign money to the US and at the same time it charged vitally higher price of its 3rd office building near the Los Angeles airport, thus spiring the anger of public. Facing this situation, k stopped its relationship with P to punish P, but this won’t have a mearable change on P’s action, while gov improved the tax on their every office building to be sold largely——ultimately, P has to put its price down to the average leve. Therefore, in my opion, gov has a more far-reaching impact on the operation of a community or a nation.
【存在的問題】:
1)第一句:沒有說政府的影響多的后果是什么,就只能讓讀者讀出一個(gè)現(xiàn)象,但是讀不出方向。
我應(yīng)該在我的文字中明確給出方向是什么。Ie:
如果我支持“gov作用更重要”:就說“政府影響更大則有什么好處”或“企業(yè)影響更大有什么壞處”;
如果我支持“企業(yè)應(yīng)該作用更大”:就反之。
而我目前的表述:只有“政府影響更大”,沒有“后果如何”,就是事實(shí)出來了,觀點(diǎn)沒有,所以不行!
【修改后】:第一句——
Gov has larger effect on the control of the bad speculation of corp J, an estate company, than J’s chief client K, an medical corp, thus preventing the flowing of work force and further decline of stock price of J.[LC1]
2)中間的elaboration太長太繞:讓人讀的煩、容易讀不懂,必須改得短且精煉一些。
第三種:
Doesn’t a powerful leader can really affect a course of a nation more widely than the government?
【說明】:
以上3種屬于高分的寫法,但不是只局限于這3個(gè),有自己認(rèn)為好的也可以。
在進(jìn)入II之前,有一點(diǎn)說一下:關(guān)于“核心概念”和“概念間關(guān)系”的界定——
(1) 原理:要對一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)發(fā)表我的評論(同意或不同意),前提是知道這個(gè)觀點(diǎn)是什么。而界定的目的就是“搞清楚題目什么”的過程!
(2)怎么處理:基于1)——
1) 如果題目本身很具體了(注意:具體≠簡單,只是說概念的含義精確了不會ambiguous了):就不需要這步,因?yàn)闆]有必要,加上去是畫蛇添足,違背了“every word tells”。
比如:
A)"Clearly, government has a responsibility to support the arts. However, if that support is going to produce anything of value, government must place no restrictions on the art that is produced. "
To what extent do you agree or disagree with the opinion expressed above?
B)是否同意“當(dāng)今社會在網(wǎng)上找工作更好”
以上兩個(gè)就是很具象化的,不需要界定。
2) 題目中存在一些抽象詞、且關(guān)系不清楚,就需要先界定:在我看來,**是什么意思。
比如:
A)"What education fails to teach us is to see the human community as one. Rather than focus on the unique differences that separate one nation from another, education should focus on the similarities among all people and places on Earth."
【分析】:對“共性”和“個(gè)性”應(yīng)該界定一下
B)"There is only one definition of success-to be able to spend your life in your own way. "
【分析】:對“成功”界定一下。
Q:怎么界定“成功”?因?yàn)檫@題中已經(jīng)在問“def”了啊?
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