托福寫作范文學(xué)習(xí)：長壽的秘訣

　　In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

　　寫作思路展開結(jié)構(gòu)分析

　　首先提供一份數(shù)據(jù)給大家參考：20世紀初全球平均年齡(life expectancy)大約45歲。到20世紀末，這個數(shù)字已經(jīng)增長到70歲左右?？忌梢越Y(jié)合這份數(shù)據(jù)來做一些文章。然后要分析人們越來越長壽的原因，大家可以從這幾點來展開：越來越好的飲食條件，飲食衛(wèi)生，越來越科學(xué)的飲食模式;越來越發(fā)達的醫(yī)療技術(shù)、越來越完善的醫(yī)療保健系統(tǒng);經(jīng)濟穩(wěn)定、社會穩(wěn)定。舉個極端一點的例子：前蘇聯(lián)(the previous Soviet Union)解體(disintegration/breakup)后，俄羅斯的平均年齡大幅度下降。

　　本話題高分范文賞析

　　Among various factors that contribute to today's longevity of people are three most obvious ones: the improvement of food conditions, the development of modern medical technology, and finally current stability of economy in our country.

　　Food conditions are better than before and are still being developed with a rapid pace. First of all, foods are more hygienic. People today drink untainted mineral water, sterilized skim milk, which are cheaply supplied in supermarkets. Furthermore, foods are more nutrient. Not to mention various carefully designed nutrient products. People can just ignore the possibility of being dystrophic, since they can keep nutrient balance by simply taking a cheap pill of vitamin compound every day. Another essential improvement that contributes to people's longevity is swiftly developing medical technology. Development of modern medical technology has always been amazing. Certain diseases such as tuberculosis, pneumonia, and dysentery are now easy to remedy with low expenses, but in the past, they are all probably lethal ones. The dental technology seems developed little except its exorbitantly charged bill, yet the simplest technology contributes to people's longevity most. It is not difficult to imagine that if an individual who lived in the past got a toothache, without certain dental care which is common today, he was certainly in an awful prospect: he might even die of a toothache!

　　Current societal and economic stabilization is also a very indispensable factor. People have less pressure in a more stable society, the less pressure they suffer, the healthier they are. Today's ideal stabilization even provides people an opportunity to secure their future—buy insurances. Various types of insurances are readily available, which make people feel safe, and have to a large extent reduced people' anxieties, and therefore indirectly contribute significantly to the longevity of people.