雅思作文教你十招得高分 議論文

 

六、措詞毛病

學(xué)生在寫作中沒(méi)有養(yǎng)成良好的推敲，斟酌句子中所選用詞的習(xí)慣。大部分考生隨心所欲，拿來(lái)就用，所以作文中用詞不當(dāng)?shù)腻e(cuò)誤隨處可見(jiàn)。

比如：The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.

分析：顯然，考生把obstacles“障礙”，“障礙物”誤作substance“物質(zhì)”了。另外“the increasing use(不斷增加的使用)”應(yīng)改為“abusive use(濫用)”。

改為：The abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.

七、指代不清

指代不清主要講的是代詞與被指代的人或物關(guān)系不清，或者先后所用的代詞不一致。

比如：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid.

讀完上面這一句話，讀者無(wú)法明確地判斷兩位姑娘中誰(shuí)將結(jié)婚，誰(shuí)將當(dāng)伴娘。如果我們把易于引起誤解的代詞所指代的對(duì)象加以明確，意思就一目了然了。這個(gè)句子可改為：

Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid.

八、不間斷句子

這個(gè)錯(cuò)誤的出現(xiàn)受中文意識(shí)的影響很大。很多考生在寫句子時(shí)，句子之間缺乏有效的連接成分。甚至，有的句子寫的比較中式化。

比如：There are many ways we get to know the outside world.

分析：這個(gè)句子包含了兩層完整的意思：“there are many ways”以及“we get to know the outside world”。簡(jiǎn)單地把它們連在一起就不妥當(dāng)了。

改為：

There are many ways for us to learn about the outside world. 或：

There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world.

九、累贅

寫句子沒(méi)有一個(gè)多余的詞;寫段落沒(méi)有一個(gè)無(wú)必要的句子。能用單詞的不用詞組;能用詞組的不用從句或句子。

比如：In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him.

本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同謂語(yǔ)從句，我們按照上述“能用詞組的不用從句”可以改為：In spite of his laziness, I like him.

比如：For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.

整個(gè)句子可以大大簡(jiǎn)化為：

Diligent people use money only to buy what they need.

十、不連貫

不連貫是指一個(gè)句子前言不對(duì)后語(yǔ)，或是結(jié)構(gòu)上不暢通，這也是考生常犯的毛病。

比如：The fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.

分析：the fresh water與逗號(hào)后的it不連貫，it與things在數(shù)方面不一致。