六級高分作文_放下包袱

　放下包袱

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay based on the picture below. You should describe the picture, explain its intended meaning and then state how you will develop your ability to ease your burden . You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

審題立意

1. 導(dǎo)語解讀：要求考生根據(jù)漫畫的內(nèi)容就“放下包袱”這一話題進行簡述，并闡述如何培養(yǎng)能力放下包袱。

2. 文章立意：雄心、抱負、理想等刺激我們不斷地追求，但如果包袱過重，壓力過大，我們一定無法支撐太久。因此，放下包袱、輕松前行很重要。

寫作思路

1. 第一段簡要描述漫畫內(nèi)容，然后提出論點：放下包袱很重要。

2. 第二段承上啟下，通過設(shè)問的方式提出如何放下包袱。

3. 第三段至最后為主體段落，從兩個方面論述如何放下包袱。

參考范文

As is shown by the drawing, a man could have gone easily with the bike but the heavy burden on his back almost overwhelmed him and he was too exhausted to go further. 1 The drawing is indicative of a phenomenon that many people tend to bear many burdens while not knowing how to ease them. 2 However, there’s no doubt that to ease the burden is of great importance to everyone. 3

How to develop your ability to ease the burden? In my opinion, there are some good ways to do that. 4

Learn to give up something unnecessary. There are probably many things you want to achieve. But due to the limited time and resources, it is impossible to achieve everything you want. If you try to do too many things at once, you’ll have to bear heavy burdens, which may give rise to your breakdown. You need to choose and prioritize. 5

Learn to reduce your stress. Pursuing too many things means giving you unnecessary pressure. Don’t let your ambition hinder you from enjoying your life. Avoid spreading yourself too thin and free up time to build meaningful relationships. 5

Only in this way can we lead a well-balanced life. 6

如圖所示，一個人騎車本可以很輕松地行走，但是他背上的重負幾乎將他壓垮，導(dǎo)致他太累而無法繼續(xù)走下去了。圖片表明了一種現(xiàn)象，很多人往往都能承受負擔，卻不知道如何減輕負擔。然而，減輕負擔對于每一個人來說無疑都十分重要。

如何才能培養(yǎng)你減輕負擔的能力呢？我認為，這里有幾個很好的方法。

學(xué)著放棄一些不必要的事情。也許有很多事都是你想去完成的。但是由于時間有限，資源有限，完成你想要的所有事情是不可能的。如果你試圖一次辦成過多事情，你就不得不承受沉重的負擔，這可能會導(dǎo)致你崩潰。你需要做出選擇和區(qū)分輕重緩急。

學(xué)著去減壓。追求太多的事物意味著給自己太多不必要的壓力。不要讓你的野心阻止你享受生活。不要讓自己同時做很多事情而心力交瘁，騰出時間去結(jié)交有意義的朋友。

只有這樣，我們才能有一個平衡的生活。

范文點評

1. 開篇簡要描述圖片的內(nèi)容。

2. 自然過渡，引出放下包袱這一話題。

3. 首段末句明確表達自己的觀點：放下包袱很重要。

4. 第二段承上啟下，用設(shè)問提出如何放下包袱。

5. 分兩個層次論證了自己的觀點，論據(jù)充分，論證有力。

6. 末段總結(jié)全文，指出放下包袱的重要性。

要點用法

overwhelm v. 壓倒，壓垮

exhausted adj. 精疲力竭的

be indicative of 暗示，表示

bear v. 承受

give rise to 引起、導(dǎo)致某事物 breakdown n. 崩潰

prioritize v. 優(yōu)先考慮

free up 空出來

well-balanced adj. 平衡的

句法點評

1. As is shown by the drawing, a man could have gone easily with the bike but the heavy burden on his back almost overwhelmed him and he was too exhausted to go further.

此句中could have gone 是情態(tài)動詞+ have done的用法，表示本可以做成某事卻沒有做成，是一種虛擬語氣。

2. The drawing is indicative of a phenomenon that many people tend to bear many burdens while not knowing how to ease them.

此句中that引導(dǎo)的是同位語從句，具體解釋phenomenon的內(nèi)容。