初中英語作文高分范文：喜歡獨自還是和一群人旅行？

Do you like traveling alone or traveling with a group of people?

學(xué)生情況：初三，公立學(xué)校學(xué)生，長遠(yuǎn)計劃去美國讀書。

I like travel alone. There are two reasons.

First, you can control your travel. That is mean can choose the way that you like, but when you travel with other people, you must consider other people, so you can't enjoy your travel. For example, you want to go to the Summer Place, but most people want to go to th Great Wall, so you can't choose your way.

Second, if you travel alone, you will very relaxed. For example, when you buy ticket, you just need buy one ticket, if you travel alone, but if you travel with a group of people, you may consider may things. For instance, you will think about how to make ticket much cheaper and which places is most people like. It wil make everyone tired.

點評：這是學(xué)生的第二篇作品，學(xué)生的作品基本沒有經(jīng)過訓(xùn)練，是比較原始的自我組織起來的結(jié)構(gòu)，可以看到擁有比較完整的開頭段和包含了兩個分論點的主題段，但結(jié)尾段的缺失使得全文結(jié)構(gòu)需要全方位的結(jié)構(gòu)重組。顯而易見的是字?jǐn)?shù)不夠的問題，還包括所書寫的句式結(jié)構(gòu)都非常簡單，在一起學(xué)習(xí)了開頭段和主題段的結(jié)構(gòu)之后，重新寫了自己的作品，最后根據(jù)給出的范文再次加深對結(jié)構(gòu)的學(xué)習(xí)。

學(xué)生重寫的作品：

Today, work pressure is so heavy that more and more people get mind sick so everyone wants to relax himself. They find many different ways to relax and discover one of the best way that called travel. Some people travel alone, others travel with a group of people. I think the best way is travel alone and there are two reasons.

First, you can control your travel. It means you can choose things that you want such as spot, food, hotel, but when you travel with others, you must consider others. For example, you want to eat Chinese food but most people want to eat Western food, so you have to eat Western food. You want to go to the Summer Place, but most people want to go to the Great Wall, so you can't choose your way. It a big disadvantage that traveling with others worse than traveling alone. Traveling alone can make you feel freedom.

Second, if you travel alone, you will fee relax. Because when you travel with others, you must obey the orders. For example, alough you feel tired, you have to get up one time, but if you travel alone, you can get up at any time that you want. You will feel relaxed. It is good for your healthy, too.

給出的范文：

In our modern society, an increasing number of people prefer to travel as their way to relax themselves. Whether we travel alone or we travel with a group has been a hot issue. Enjoying being free and relaxed, I definitely am in favor of traveling alone.

First of all, traveling alone means freedom. For me, planning where to go is of vital importance. For example, if I travel in Beijing, the Forbidden City is the unique one that I desire to visit. Time permitted, I would rather have a good time in the Forbidden City twice than visit some other attractions in Beijing. Only if I have the chance to travel by myself, can I make the final decision about which place or places of interests that I will visit.

Second of all, traveling alone brings me relaxation. If I travel with a group, I then have to consider other people's needs, including the price of the entry tickets and the taste for food. Once, I went to Hongkong with my colleagues. During the trip, they only choose to go to some place with cheaper fee. Besides, it was the food of western style that they wanted to eat. Traveling with them simply made me feel tired I wished I had traveled alone with what I wanted for relaxation.

Traveling alone gives me nothing but freedom and relaxation, as a result of which, traveling alone will always be my only choice ever.

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