高中英語(yǔ)作文|學(xué)生的壞習(xí)慣

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The Bad Manners of Students
Dear fellow students, I am going to talk about some unhealthy lifestyles which exist in our daily life. First, many students go to school without breakfast. They hold the excuse that they have no enough time.[1] Without breakfast, I think, exerts a bad effect on our health,[2] for we need enough energy to contribute to study. Second, eating junk food is a common phenomenon, which makes lots of students become fatter and weaker. Third, there are a small number of students willing to exercise, which lead to students easily fall into illness.[3]
In a word, we should eat more healthy food and work out regularly. Only when we learn to lead a scientific lifestyle[4] can we build a strong body and spirit.That's all. Thank you!
Monitor ××

【作為點(diǎn)評(píng)】
[1] they have no enough time 不符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，此處用they don't have enough time更合適。
[2] 在這個(gè)句子中沒(méi)有主語(yǔ)，可以將前面的介詞短語(yǔ)改成非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做主語(yǔ)。建議改法：Not eating breakfast, I think, exerts bad effect on our health.
[3] lead to 是一個(gè)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)，to 為介詞，后面不適合加一般陳述句作為賓語(yǔ)，建議改成：which leads to a disturbing result that students fall into illness.
[4] live/lead a good life 過(guò)好日子，如果說(shuō)形成什么樣的生活方式用develop/form；develop a scientific lifestyle.

總評(píng)：21分，這是一篇很通暢的文章，思路清晰，行文流暢。如果能避免出現(xiàn)的文中的幾個(gè)小錯(cuò)誤，使文章更完美些，分?jǐn)?shù)還能提高。