高中英語作文的練習需要長期不斷的堅持,期間找準素材更能起到事半功倍的效果。以下是小編整理的高中英語作文|專業(yè)與學校哪個更重要的資料,希望對你的英語作文練習有所幫助!
作者:陳悅 (安徽省 淮南市)
作文題目:即將步入大學的你面臨著選擇高校與選擇專業(yè)的重大挑戰(zhàn)。對于專業(yè)與學校哪個更重要,大家各持自見,請向某英文雜志社投稿,對該問題進行闡述。內(nèi)容包括:
1. 對擇校與擇專業(yè)問題的分析
2. 你的選擇和理由
全文120字左右,不得透漏個人真實信息。
習作全文:
Every student will be faced with the question after he passes the college entrance examinations: Should we choose a good major or a good university first?
Towards this [改:For this matter, With regard to this issue等], there's a totally different argument [改:there are totally different arguments]. Some students are fully convinced that choosing a desirable major is more significant.
Many students think interest matters mcuh. They believe that an ideal major is important for getting good jobs. Meanwhile, there're still other students tend to study further. [此處兩個謂語,建議改成:another 10% tend to further their study].
This may be true, but there're still opposing ideas. They hold the firmly belief [改成:hole firmly the belief] that it’s Effect of Prestige that drives them to choose the famous university. Also, some others think the good environment in the university does good to their growing [改成:growth].
Were I left to make a judgment, not will I hesitate a moment to back the latter [此處主句不該倒裝,而且也要用虛擬情態(tài)動詞would;直接寫成:I would not hesitate a moment to back the latter]. It's my thought that we can develop our interests during the college. Nevertheless, we can't give up our dream of an idea university from our childhood. So by no means will I sacrifice a famous college for a desirable major.
全文總評:該習作從主題上與命題要求完全吻合,內(nèi)容豐富,論據(jù)充分,邏輯性強。雖然在使用高級語言素材的時候出現(xiàn)一些錯誤,但不太影響理解,思想傳達的效率尚可。評定檔次為四檔高分,具體分數(shù)為19分[總分25分]。
評分者建議:該考生具備基本的寫作能力,有比較豐富的語言素材積累,但值得注意的地方有兩點:
1. 缺乏對自己作品進行基本審核的意識,比如,一個單句中只能存在一個謂語,一個謂語出現(xiàn)在句中以后,接下來還有必要出現(xiàn)動詞的時候就應該立即想到要么用從句,要么用非謂語動詞,要么就應該結(jié)束前句重新闡述。
2. 對于基礎(chǔ)詞法和常見表達還應該加強積累。實際上,每個學生都有自己原始積累的一些表達方法,一旦形成了使用習慣,就很難改變,而這些習慣中有些是錯誤的,不少同學就習慣地錯下去;有些習慣雖然是正確的,卻為陳詞濫調(diào),沒有新意。這都非常影響英語作文水平的提高。建議學生朋友建立自己的作文檔案,把每一次習作中積累到的素材進行歸納總結(jié)是最高效的提升方法。