Soon graduated, in junior high school life, I met a lot of people a lot of things, when I entered high school campus after I still think of!
Feng teacher in my junior high school learning career you let me remember, I always don't learn your English well, but you never give up me, do you often encourage me to let me find the fun of learning, the surface looks very fierce you actually very gentle. I don't want to leave you, but high school is the way I had to choose, I will miss you, when you ask we think of the teacher after graduation, I very want to loudly say to you, but I can't I can only write it in the composition, I will always remember I have a teacher she name is feng.
小編點評: 這是赤裸裸的中國式英語啊~Chinglish ??!
該篇作文的詞匯量是有的,里面用了很多比較的好的單詞和詞組,例如:compus(校園)、encourage(鼓勵)give up (放棄) think of (想起)等這些詞匯和短語都比較好,甚至該篇作文的同學想要更加高級的詞匯surface、fierce等,即使可能用法不正確,但也是值得鼓勵的。這些詞匯點都是該篇文章的亮點。
但該篇文章最大的硬傷是語法。考生在文章里面應(yīng)用了時間狀語從句,分詞作狀語等,這些都不錯,可是文章仔細看的話,其內(nèi)部的語法是完全錯誤的。
所以在此小編建議考生,增加詞匯量很重要,可是詞匯這些珍珠只有穿在語法這條鏈子上詞匯真正的發(fā)光。否則,其價值可能只是類似一塊石子。