I remember the day I first arrived at university. My parents and I drove for hours before we finally got there. I was excited and nervous about starting a new life. As soon as we arrived, I went straight to my dormitory to put my things down. But when I open the door, I found out my roommate had already arrived. She was a kind girl and we got along well right away.
The next day, I had my first class. I was nervous because I didn't know anyone in the class. However, the teacher was very friendly and made me feel welcome. During the class, he talked a lot about the subject and gave us some useful advices. After class, I met some other students and started to make new friends.
Over the next few weeks, I adapted to the new environment quickly. I joined a few clubs and participated in some events. But one day, I forgot my student ID card at the library. I was worried because I needed it to enter the library and for other things too. I went back to the library to look for it, but I couldn't find it. Finally, a librarian helped me and I found my ID card.
答案解析:
1.錯誤:when I open the door
更正:when I opened the door
解析:描述過去的事情時,應(yīng)使用過去時。
2.錯誤:gave us some useful advices
更正:gave us some useful advice
解析:“advice”為不可數(shù)名詞,沒有復(fù)數(shù)形式。
3.錯誤:Over the next few weeks, I adapted to the new environment quickly
更正:In the next few weeks, I adapted to the new environment quickly
解析:在描述接下來的一段時間時,使用“in”比“over”更為常見。
4.錯誤:But one day, I forgot my student ID card at the library
更正:One day, I forgot my student ID card at the library
解析:前句并沒有提及與前文相反的情況,因此不需要使用“But”。
5.錯誤:I went back to the library to look for it, but I couldn't find it
更正:I went back to the library to look for it, but unfortunately, I couldn't find it
解析:加入“unfortunately”使句子表達更加完整,強調(diào)了作者找不到ID卡的沮喪情緒。
6.錯誤:Finally, a librarian helped me and I found my ID card
更正:Finally, a librarian helped me, and I found my ID card
解析:在并列句中,使用逗號分隔兩個完整的句子更為常見。
7.錯誤:無
更正:在“I remember the day I first arrived at university.”后添加“It was an important milestone in my life.”
解析:為了增加文章的深度和連貫性,可以在文章開頭添加一句描述這個日子重要性的句子。