托福寫(xiě)作高分滿(mǎn)分范文點(diǎn)評(píng)和思路解析：帶給學(xué)校的改變

　　What change do you want to make in a school you attended?

　　If you could make one important change in a school that you attended, what change would you make? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

　　寫(xiě)作思路展開(kāi)結(jié)構(gòu)分析

　　這道題目本質(zhì)上是希望考生給自己上過(guò)的學(xué)校提提意見(jiàn)，因此大家需要注意兩點(diǎn)，一個(gè)是要切合實(shí)際，不要提一些不可能實(shí)現(xiàn)的改變，另一點(diǎn)是最好能夠聯(lián)系自身的經(jīng)歷來(lái)說(shuō)，比如自己上過(guò)的學(xué)校有哪個(gè)地方不太好等等。小編相信大家對(duì)于自己的學(xué)校都是存在一些不滿(mǎn)意的地方的，從這個(gè)出發(fā)點(diǎn)來(lái)思考比較容易找到展開(kāi)的方向。

　　本話(huà)題高分范文賞析

　　While the school system in China is generally quite good, there is one problem that I have found prevalent through all of my years of education. The problem is that the teacher to student ratio is too small. This situation was of no benefit to anyone: the teachers, or the students. If there were more teachers in each school, class sizes would be smaller, there would be a greater diversity of knowledge and information, and teachers would be less tired, and would therefore give better classes. Class sizes are overwhelmingly large in China. In many of the courses offered in elementary school and high school, there are over forty students in a class. It is very difficult to learn in this type of situation. The teacher has no time to spend with individual students who need extra help, and students are often embarrassed to ask questions in front of so many other students. If class sizes could be shrunk, the learning curve in most courses would rise dramatically. With more teachers at every school, the collective mass of knowledge and information would rise. Everyone in the world has his/her own very particular set of information. People are like snowflakes; each person is different and has varied experiences from the next person. With more people at a school, there is a wider knowledge base to draw from. This would obviously be an advantage to students, as schools could offer a wider range of courses in a variety of fields of study. Therefore, if I was given the opportunity to change one thing in the high school that I once attended, I would like to try to recruit more qualified teachers and give them more decent pays. This would benefit everyone. It is an unfortunate fact that most school districts cannot afford to make this happen.