托福大作文范文:觀影的危害

　　還記得文章第一段嗎?Introduction+Thesis，大家平時要按這種固定的結構多多練習。

　　今天我們學習第二段：

　　To begin with, I just don’t enjoy thegeneral hassle of the evening. Since small local movie theaters are a thing ofthe past, I have to drive for 15 minutes to get to the nearest multiplex. Theparking lot is shared with several restaurants and a supermarket, so it’s always jammed. I have to drive around in an endless line, with theconstant that tickets for the show I want will sell out. If we do get tickets,the theater will be so crowded that I won’t be able to sit with my friends, or we’ll have to sit in a front row gapping up at a giant screen. I have toshell out a ridiculous amount of money-up to 11 dollars-for a ticket. Thatentitles me to sit while my shoes seal themselves to a sticky floor coated withspilled soda, bubble gum, and crushed Raisins.

　　第二段同樣由兩個結構組成(Point+Support)。第一句是中心句，非常簡單指出了不喜歡去電影院看電影的第一個原因就是不喜歡晚上的匆匆忙忙。注意寫作中最最重要的結構就是：Point+Support，當你給出一個觀點或一個評價，一定需要強有力的支持。這里作者說不喜歡去電影院看電影就是因為不喜歡晚上太匆忙，讀到這包括我在內(nèi)的很多人都不懂呀：看個電影有什么匆忙的?別急，作者進行了詳盡有力的支持，用到的方法是按時間順序列舉說明：開車到最近的電影院就要15分鐘，好不容易開到了又要排隊等停車位又要擔心票賣光了，真買到了票又不一定有合適座位，票還貴，地板還。。。這樣就有理有據(jù)地解釋清楚了第一個原因，大家可以模仿這種寫作方法，一定要注意的是：像作者一樣填充進大量的細節(jié)!

　　托福大作文最佳范文——The Hazards of Moviegoing

　　寫作文最基本的結構：Point+Support

　　文章第三段如下：

　　Second, the theater offers temping snacks that I really don’t need. Like most of us, I have to battle an expanding waistline. Athome I do pretty well by simply not buying stuff that is bad for me. I can makedo with snacks like celery and carrot sticks because there is no ice cream inthe freezer. Going to the theater, however, is like spending my evening in a7-Eleven that’s been equipped with a movie screen and comfortableseats. As I try to persuade myself to just have a Diet Coke, the smell of freshpopcorn dripping with butter soon overcomes me. Chocolate bars the size ofsmall automobiles seem to jump into my hands. I risk pulling out my fillings asI chew enormous mouthfuls of Milk Duds. By the time I leave the theater, I feeldisgusted with myself.

　　同樣，第一句是中心句，作者不喜歡去電影院看電影的第二個原因是電影院里有太多的不健康食品啦。聰明的你讀完第一句，應該已經(jīng)預判到往下該怎么寫了吧?支持這個觀點!這段作者又用到一個新方法——做對比。對比是人們使用的最強烈的表達手法，還記得每次發(fā)成績單后，媽媽總會說，你看誰誰都考了一百分，你才八十呀!這就是對比，對比總能突出一些事情。回到段落，At home開頭，作者先說自己在家吃什么呢?蘿卜條和芹菜條，相當健康。Going to the theater呢?可樂呀爆米花呀巧克力的誘惑都襲來了，其中用到了夸張的寫法。這么一做對比，讀者就又懂了這第二個原因：嗯，確實很不健康。請大家多多模仿練習做對比的寫作方法吧。