2013年6月英語(yǔ)四級(jí)寫(xiě)作分析以及例文（文都版）

第一部分：考試分析

一：形式

1. 有圖片，圖片要點(diǎn)為：一對(duì)父子就一個(gè)問(wèn)題展開(kāi)討論;

2，英文提示：a 簡(jiǎn)要描述圖片;b 給出有關(guān)于主題“the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big”的觀點(diǎn)

二.寫(xiě)作應(yīng)對(duì)

1. 簡(jiǎn)要描述圖片：

簡(jiǎn)要描述，即，描述圖中主題，并引出相關(guān)的主題即可，故可以結(jié)合考研春季基礎(chǔ)班講義，使用描述句式如下：

A：簡(jiǎn)單型

As we can see from the picture，there are two persons, debating about the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big, who are a father and his son.

B：復(fù)雜型

As is vividly depicted in the picture, two men ，who are a father and his son，are talking about what should be done firstly，the small thing or the big ones.Simple as it is, what the picture conveys to us is thought-provoking.

2. 判斷寫(xiě)作類型：

題干中有明顯的兩種觀點(diǎn)，即先做小事，或者大事，只不過(guò)，出題人要求學(xué)生寫(xiě)的是關(guān)于先做小事的重要的意義，故可以使用兩種觀點(diǎn)對(duì)立的“觀點(diǎn)分型”寫(xiě)作模板帶入如下：

第一段：說(shuō)明現(xiàn)象

第二段：觀點(diǎn)討論

第三段：觀點(diǎn)總結(jié)

3. 主題

該主題，可以被分為三個(gè)部分，即：

A：the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big

B：doing small things

C: doing something big

以上三個(gè)內(nèi)容在每段中確保出現(xiàn)1-2次，該作文便不跑題。

第二部分：例文寫(xiě)作與模板對(duì)比

第一段：描述圖片+說(shuō)明現(xiàn)象

As we can see from the picture，there are two persons, debating about the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big, who are a father and his son. Recently, the issue of the importance of doing small things has aroused wide concern among the public. Especially the young generation living in the big cities, they tend to do the big ones firstly, paying no attention to the fact that this behavior may pose underlying threat to their precious life and may even endanger others.

(原有模板)

Nowadays/recently, the phenomenon/ issue of …… has arouse wide concern among the public. Especially the young generation living in the big cities/metropolis, they tend to do sth, ignoring/paying no attention to the fact that this behavior may pose underlying threat to their precious life and may even endanger others.

第二段：觀點(diǎn)討論

Does anyone claim the same attitude towards this issue?Definitely not，actually,opinions vary from person to person.Some maintain that the doing some big is beneficial to students.However,quite a few people hold the opposite opinion that the doing some big is detrimental to the youngsters, and they think that the merits of students’ doing some small things far outweigh its demerits.To my way of thinking,we should know the the importance that why we must do small things before we undertake something big. If we know the significance,we will choice the right way and do the right things.

(原有模板)

Does anyone maintain/claim the same attitude towards this issue/phenomenon? Definitely not，actually/in fact，opinions vary from person to person.Some maintain/argue/hold/claim that something is beneficial to sth.However，quite a few people hold the opposite opinion that something is detrimental to sth .The demerits/disadvantages of sth. far outweigh its merits/advantages.

第三段：觀點(diǎn)總結(jié)

the problem of doing big things firstly mentioned above will bound to generate severe consequences if measures should be adopted before the thing get worse.What we should do is to encourage the merits and diminish the demerits to the least extent. It is high time that all of us ,parents,educators,and the authorities, make combined efforts to let young men know the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big .With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that this problem can be perfectly solved in the near future

(原有模板)

To my way of thinking\From my perspective, The problem mentioned above will bound to generate severe consequences if we keep turning a blind eye and deaf ear to it.

Measures should be adopted before things get worse.What we should do is to encourage the merits and diminish the demerits to the least extent.It is high time that all of us ,parents，educators，and the authorities, make combined efforts to put an end to this situation.We should appeal to the relevant administration departments to strengthen supervision over.With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that this problem can be perfectly solved in the near future

總結(jié)：

改作文中，第二段落內(nèi)容容易較為單薄，故建議同學(xué)們將原模板的第三段內(nèi)容中，我的觀點(diǎn)寫(xiě)到第二段的結(jié)尾處，已調(diào)整三段之間比例。

最后，還是那句話，我們不押題，我們只相信自己的實(shí)力!任你出題人幾路來(lái)，我只一路前行，為了自己的未來(lái)!