2011年6月英語四級真題作文范文(滬江網(wǎng)校標準版)

Doing Shopping Online

With the development of the Internet, shopping is no longer a tiring thing. Just click your mouse to choose the articles you like, and the purchase is done. You don’t even have to step out of the room. It seems all easy and quick.

However, people’s opinions vary on this trend. Some believe that on line shopping is time and money saving. With plentiful selection options, they can buy whatever they like at any time conveniently. Still others insist that mis-purchasing alone is annoying enough, not to mention the credibility of the sellers and the safety of their accounts.

In my opinion, the convenience and excitement of on line shopping is beyond all doubts. In the meantime, we must always bear in mind that certain traps do exist, so we’d better make sure the sellers are trustworthy before buying. In addition, we should also guard ourselves from the potential hackers who might steal our account information.

文章點評：

這是一篇“中等偏上”的學生作文。 本文先對網(wǎng)購熱潮進行簡介，引出全篇；接著對網(wǎng)絡購物的正反兩方面進行對比；最后提出自己的看法結束全篇。整體看思路清晰，邏輯嚴密，行文流暢，用語較為地道。

下面說一下這篇文章的有待提高之處：

1. 文章結構上，能看得出該同學試圖采用議論文的“三段式”（提出問題、分析問題、解決問題）。 但是，以“With the development of the Internet”為開首語，有些落入俗套，有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加注意，應該能寫出更好的句子。

2. 微觀語言點方面，有些語句稍顯啰嗦，比如With plentiful selection options… 簡化成With plentiful selections… 更好，意思沒有絲毫減損，表達力反而增強許多。