劍13Test3小作文9分范文賞析：quantities of electricity

　　

　　劍橋雅思小作文審題

　　圖中20個數(shù)據(jù)，是不是都要寫?

　　我們得定義這個“寫”的意思。

　　1) 不用具體把每一個數(shù)字都列舉出來，但是2) 只選擇一些國家來寫，或者3) 一些國家只寫產(chǎn)電量不寫用電量(或者反過來)，都是不行的。

　　所謂不用把每個數(shù)據(jù)列舉出來，是說一些數(shù)據(jù)可以打包處理——比如給一個區(qū)間(考鴨要自己找到上限和下限)。但是，只有接近的數(shù)據(jù)才能放到一個區(qū)間內(nèi)。

　　如何劃分主體段?

　　常見的分段方法是，將數(shù)據(jù)接近的寫到一段。但是，這樣就會導致一個主體段特別短(4個數(shù)據(jù))，另一個主體段特別長(16個數(shù)據(jù))。所以，這個題目例外，建議前五和后五個國家各分一段。這樣，對應(yīng)的2個主體段字數(shù)就會差不多。

　　要寫的 comparisons 有哪些?

　　comparisons 是考鴨作文特別容易遺漏的信息，接下來會進行逐一列舉

　　1) 產(chǎn)電量和用電量最大(特別大)的國家

　　2) 每個國家產(chǎn)電量和用電量的差異，都不大

　　3) 產(chǎn)電量和用電量的差異，只有 Germany 產(chǎn)電少于用電

　　4) Russia 產(chǎn)電量和用電量最接近(考慮寫，因為題目信息太多，建議次要信息都不寫)

　　劍橋雅思小作文9分范文

　　開頭段

　　The bar chart presents data relating to the quantities of electricity (measured in billions of kilowatts per hour) produced and used in 2014 by the ten countries in the world that produce and use the greatest amount of electricity.

　　主體段1：總體的對比

　　It is clear that China and the USA are the biggest producers and users of electricity by far. Except for Germany, all the countries in question produce more electricity than they use, though the differences are generally not large.

　　主體段2：前五個國家的數(shù)據(jù)

　　China and the USA produced around 5,400 billion kWh and around 4,100 billion kWh of electricity respectively. Further, both nations used only fractionally less than this sum. Russia, Japan and India occupied positions three, four and five in the top ten, with corresponding consumption figures ranging between 1,057 billion and 871 billion with respect to generation and ranging from 1,038 billion to just under 700 billion for usage.

　　主體段3：后五個國家的數(shù)據(jù)

　　The final five places in the top ten were occupied (in descending order) by Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and the Republic of Korea. The spread of both production and usage figures was approximately 620 billion to around 450 billion. Canada, France and Brazil were notable in that their production quantities were all at least 75 billion higher than their usage figures. In contrast, Germany consumed about 60 billion more than it produced.

　　雅思小作文相關(guān)詞匯

　　1) fractional：Very small; insignificant fractionally=slightly

　　2) spread：The extent or limit to which something is or can be spread