雅思小作文解析及范文:廣播電視白天的觀眾數(shù)

　　Task：Radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.

　　

 

　　范文解讀：

　　以下是6分, 7分和9分范文，可以看出，上6分的文章都有一個共性，就是沒有大的語法錯誤，分段合適，表達(dá)清晰，且進行適當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯替換。而7分比6分好在如下方面：

　　1. 7分加入了對比。

　　2. 7分的句式更加的多樣和靈活，而6分文章的句式單一，而且again使用過多。

　　3. 7分有足夠的信號詞(如however, after that等)，這能幫助考官理解文章的層次和結(jié)構(gòu)。

　　4. 最后，9分范文的特點是句式多樣，詞匯的同義替換和詞性變化十分明顯，同時表達(dá)更加細(xì)節(jié)化。

　　參考范文：

　　6分范文

　　The graph shows the percentage of audiences over 4 yes old of UK follows the radio and television throughout the day during the period October-December 1992.

　　It has been observed from the graph that less than 10% audiences follows the radio at 6:00 am and the percentage raised to a peak around 30% at 8′AM and decline gradually to around 10% during the period 2′00 to 4′00 Pm and again raised a bi t to around 12% between 4′00 to 6′00 PM. It then again dropped to below 10% at around 10′PM. The rate again raised to a bit between 10′00 PM to 12′00 PM and then dropped slowly by 4′00 AM.

　　On the other hand, the rate of television audiences raises 0-10% during the period 6′00 to 8′00 am and remain steady up to 1 0′AM and then gradually goes down by 12′00 noon. The percentage raised dramatically to around 15% by 2′00 noon. The percentage raised dramatically goes down by 12′00 noon. The percentage raised dramatically to around 15% by 2′00 PM which again raised to a peak above 40% between 6′00-8′00 PM and then gradually dropped between the period 12′00 PM to 4′00 AM.

　　(237 words)

　　7分范文

　　The graph shows the change of percentage of TV and Radio audiences over 4-years old throughout the day during the period October-December 1992.

　　Firstly, it is noticeable that the percentage of audiences was 3 percent in early morning but it gradually rose up to ten percent at 8:00 am and maintained the same for the next two hours. There was a slight fall in percentage in next two hours however after that it raised sharply unto 20 percent within the next two hours. After this the graph rose very fast and attained its peak at 10 pm which was about forty 5 percent. The graph gradually fell down and at 2:00 am it was at five percent.

　　Differently, the peak percentage of the radio audiences was at 8:00 am which was about 30 percent. Then it gradually fell and corresponded with the television one at 2 pm. After that it gradually decreased but with a small increase in percentage at 4:30 to 6:00 pm. The percentage of audience then gradually went down and at 4 am, the lowest level at near 2 percent.

　　Generally, these graphs prove the progressive popularity of television.

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　　9分范文

　　The graph shows the change of percentage of TV and Radio audiences over 4-years old throughout the day during the period October-December 1992.

　　The data indicates that the percentage of radio listeners started at 8% at 7am and increased substantially before 8:00 am, when the percentage amounted to a peak of 27%. The percentage then declined steadily to 11% at 4:00 pm, which was followed by a slight increase to 15% at 5:00 pm. However, from then on, there was again a gradual decrease to 2% until 4:00 am, when the percentage bottomed out. The period from 4:00 am to 6:00 am saw another slight rise to 4% in radio listeners.

　　Similarly, the percentage of TV viewers went up from 6:00 am to 8:30 am, when there was a leveling off at 8% for the next one hour and a half. After a slight decrease, the percentage rose sharply to 15% between 12 pm and 2 pm with surpassing that of Radio in 1 pm, before it dropped slightly. The peak (45%) was reached at 8:00 pm after a massive rise from 14% since 3:00 pm. However, the period between 8:00 pm and 3:00 am saw a slump in television viewers. The percentage reached the bottom of 3% at 3:00 am, when there was a slight rise afterwards.

　　In conclusion, the popularity of Radio was higher in the morning while the reverse was true for TV at night.

　　(238 words)