避免使用語(yǔ)言弱的“be”動(dòng)詞
1、在“here”或“there”開(kāi)頭的句子中,把“be”動(dòng)詞后的名詞代詞變成改寫(xiě)句的主語(yǔ)
例如:
1) Weak:There is no opportunity for promotion.
Revision:No opportunity for promotion exists.
2) Weak:Here are the books you ordered.
Revision:The books you ordered have arrived.
2、表語(yǔ)轉(zhuǎn)換為不同的修飾語(yǔ)
例如:
Weak:The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.
Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (轉(zhuǎn)換為前置定語(yǔ))
Or:The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (轉(zhuǎn)換為并列結(jié)構(gòu)作后置定語(yǔ))
3、作表語(yǔ)用的形容詞或名詞變?yōu)樾袨閯?dòng)詞
例如:
1) Weak:The team members are good players.
Revision:The team members play well.
2) Weak:One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.
Revision:One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.
表語(yǔ)轉(zhuǎn)化為不同的修飾語(yǔ)
很多烤鴨不明白什么時(shí)候用主動(dòng),什么被動(dòng)!用錯(cuò)了,雅思寫(xiě)作分?jǐn)?shù)自然不高!這樣做,也是因?yàn)檫@個(gè)原因!
例如:
1、Weak:The organization has been supported by charity.
Better:Charity has supported the organization.
2、Weak:The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
Better:Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
使用具體的動(dòng)詞
比較具體的描寫(xiě)會(huì)讓文章看起來(lái)更有說(shuō)服力,分?jǐn)?shù)當(dāng)然能提高啦!
例如:
1、Poor:My supervisor went past my desk.
Better:My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
2、Poor:She is a careful shopper.
Better:She compares prices and quality.
不要使用語(yǔ)言過(guò)長(zhǎng)且累贅的詞語(yǔ)
寫(xiě)作不是用的詞匯越高深就越高分,想提高成績(jī)就要用詞簡(jiǎn)單、生動(dòng)。
例如:
1、Wordy:My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
Improved:My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
2、Wordy:We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
Improved:We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
3、Redundant:We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
Improved:We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
4、Redundant:My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
Improved:My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
避免陳舊詞語(yǔ)或難懂的專業(yè)術(shù)語(yǔ)
雅思是一門(mén)語(yǔ)言考試,主要考察烤鴨們的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力,而寫(xiě)作關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)就在文章的表現(xiàn)力上!
例如:
1、Weak:They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
Improved:They will not agree to any of his proposals.
2、Weak:I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
Improved:I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.