句子結構是雅思寫作評分標準“語法的多樣性與準確度”中一項十分重要的考量因素,但這并不意味著要求考生具備寫長難句的能力。在追求輸出像雅思閱讀一樣精到的語言之前,我們首先要確保的應當是寫出來的句子是正確的。有效的句子甚而段落通常應當同時滿足以下五個要素:一致、連貫、簡潔、強調、多樣。
1. 一致:如句內的邏輯關系,注意檢查是否存在簡單推論、邏輯殘缺、邏輯悖論、依賴偏見等。
Born in a small town in South Chinain the early 1950s, he grew up to be a famous musician.
→ He was born in a small town in South China in the early 1950s. In his childhood he liked to sing songs. Later he entered a conservatory. In the 1970s he became a famous musician.
2. 連貫:這個問題在平行結構、共用主語、使用指代的情況下尤其需要注意。
We thought she was charming, intelligent, and a very capable young woman.
→ We thought she was charming, intelligent, and very capable.
Or: We thought she was a charming, intelligent, and very capable young woman.
He was knocked down by a bicycle, but it was not serious.
→ He was knocked down by a bicycle, but was not badly injured.
Looking out of the window, the grassland stretches as far as the eye can reach.
→ Looking out of the window, we can see the grassland stretching as far as the eye can reach.
Or: Outside the window, the grassland stretches as far as the eye can reach.
He gave a reason for not attending the meeting, which nobody believed.
→ He gave a reason, which nobody believed, for not attending the meeting.
Or: He gave a reason for not attending the meeting, a reason which nobody believed.
3. 簡潔:英美文化推崇坦率和直接,通常不需要體現(xiàn)咱儒家文化的含蓄和委婉。
It was small in size and blue in colour.
→ It was small and blue.
He usually likes to drink all kinds of wines that are produced in France.
→ He prefers French wines.
4. 強調:正如每篇文章都要有中心思想(main idea),每個段落都要有主題句(topic sentence)一般,每個句子都要圍繞一個中心觀點清晰地呈現(xiàn)出作者想要表現(xiàn)的重點。
He is modest and hardworking and is a good student.
→ He is a good student, modest and hardworking.
There is a big tree, which is said to be 300 years old, in the temple.
→ In the temple there is a big tree, which is said to be 300 years old.
At the sight of the disorderly crowd, he was aware that something bad would be possible.
→ The moment he saw the disorderly crowd, he knew that something bad would happen.
5. 多樣:中文重重復,英文重替代,中英差異使然。