GRE寫(xiě)作經(jīng)典范文詳細(xì)解析18
Sample Essay
The discussion of this statement turns on what is meant by "little real progress" from the first sentence, "the overall condition of humanity" in the second sentence, and "the condition of humanity" from the third sentence. To be sure, war, violence and poverty are still with us and we as mankind are probably more aware of these problems worldwide than ever before thanks to advances in technology and communication. But depending upon the definition of progress and the condition of humanity, this would appear to be an incorrect statement.
First of all, the phrase "little real progress" from the first sentence must be defined. If the author defines progress as elimination of death, war, violence and poverty, then perhaps it could be stated that humankind has not made much improvement over the past one hundred years. People are still dying, wars are still being fought, violence is present almost everywhere and there are most likely people in every country in the world living in poverty. However, if the term "progress" is defined not as elimination of these problems but rather a reduction in them, then great progress has been made over the past century. Life expectancies are up in nearly every country of the world due to improvements in medicine and the scientific study of the human body. War and violence, although still present, has been reduced and to a large part confined to certain areas of the world rather than the global wars of the past such was World Wars I and II. Poverty has also been reduced as international trade has lead to economic improvements in many formerly impoverished nations. Very real progress has been made in these areas over the past one hundred years.
Secondly, the phrases "the overall condition of humanity" and "the condition of humanity" must be defined. If the terms mean that we are all still born into pain, suffer many tragedies during our lives, and still die in the end, then of course the overall condition of humanity is no better than it was one hundred or even one hundred thousand years ago. Life is still life, and no matter what technological innovations come along, it is unlikely that the basic facts of living as a member of the human race will ever change. However, if the term means how we are able to live our lives during the time that we are given, then again tremendous progress has been made during the past century. Cures have been found for many diseases, some of which have officially been completely eliminated. Medical treatments for other diseases have made them less deadly or less debilitating. For example, many cancer victims that would have died in the past can now go on living comfortably and cancer-free after treatment. Diabetics who would have died in the past can now live nearly normal lives. Even poor eyesight can be effectively eliminated through laser surgery. It would seem to be beyond argument that overall, the condition of humanity is much better now than it was one century ago.
If one takes a very narrow definition of "progress" and "the condition of humanity", it could be fairly stated that mankind has made little in the way of advancement over the past century. Millions of people worldwide still live in poverty. Acquired Immune Deficiency Syndrome (AIDS) is killing millions of people with no cure in sight. War and violence continues in the Middle East, Africa and Afghanistan. But to take this narrow point of view would be to ignore the obvious tremendous advances that have been made over the past one hundred years by the human race. As mankind continues on into the twenty-first century, it would be preferable to consider all that has been accomplished over the past one hundred years and to look ahead to future advances over the next century instead of ignoring mankind's obviously improved circumstances today.
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觀點(diǎn)陳述型作文/[題目]
"在過(guò)去約一個(gè)世紀(jì)的時(shí)間中，人類幾乎沒(méi)有實(shí)現(xiàn)真正的進(jìn)步。技術(shù)創(chuàng)新確實(shí)發(fā)生了，但人類的總體狀況毫無(wú)改觀。戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)、暴力，以及貧窮仍然伴隨著我們。技術(shù)無(wú)法改善人類的生存狀況。"
[范文正文]
上述陳述中的探討所圍繞的是這樣三個(gè)概念的含義，即第一句中的"little real progress"，第二句中的"the overall condition of humanity"，以及第三句中的"the condition of humanity".毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)，戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)、暴力以及貧窮仍然伴隨著我們，并且，作為人類，由于技術(shù)與通信的進(jìn)步，我們可能比以往任何時(shí)候都更深切地意識(shí)到了這些問(wèn)題。但除非將"progress"和"the condition of humanity"這樣的概念進(jìn)行清晰界定，否則，上述陳述將是相當(dāng)謬誤的。
首先，第一句中的"little real progress"必須予以界定。如果作者將"progress"定義為祓除死亡、戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)、暴力以及貧窮，那么或許可以這樣說(shuō)，人類在過(guò)去的100多年中并未取得太大的進(jìn)展。人們?nèi)栽诓粩嗨劳觯瑧?zhàn)爭(zhēng)仍在進(jìn)行，暴力幾乎到處存在，世界每個(gè)國(guó)家都有人生活于貧困之中。但是，如果"progress"這一術(shù)語(yǔ)并非被定義為對(duì)上述問(wèn)題的消除，而是對(duì)這些問(wèn)題的削減，那么，過(guò)去一個(gè)世紀(jì)中人類確實(shí)取得了重大進(jìn)步。由于醫(yī)學(xué)和對(duì)人體科學(xué)研究水平的提高，全世界幾乎每個(gè)國(guó)家中人類壽命都呈上升趨勢(shì)。戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)與暴力，雖然仍然存在，卻已被減少，且在很大程度上都被限制在世界的某些地區(qū)，而再也不是像第一、第二次世界大戰(zhàn)那樣波及全球。隨著國(guó)際貿(mào)易在許多以前的貧窮國(guó)家導(dǎo)致了經(jīng)濟(jì)改善，貧困也得以減輕。在過(guò)去的100年中，這些領(lǐng)域中已取得了極為真實(shí)的進(jìn)步。其次，"the overall condition of humanity"以及"the condition of humanity"必須予以界定。如果這些術(shù)語(yǔ)指的是我們所有人仍然降生于痛苦之中，一生中蒙受著許多悲劇，并最終仍然死去，那么，毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)，人類的總體狀況絲毫不比100年或甚至10萬(wàn)年之前來(lái)得更好。生活依然是生活，無(wú)論產(chǎn)生怎樣的技術(shù)創(chuàng)新，作為人類的一員，生活的某些基本事實(shí)依舊不變。如果該術(shù)語(yǔ)指的是我們是如何在被賦予的生存時(shí)間中得以生活的，那么我們可以再一次說(shuō)，人類在過(guò)去的世紀(jì)中取得了巨大的進(jìn)步。對(duì)許多疾病，人類已找到了治愈方法，某些疾病已正式被徹底消除。對(duì)某些疾病的醫(yī)治已使這些病癥變得不再那么致命，不再那么毀滅性。例如，在過(guò)去有可能死去的許多癌癥患者，現(xiàn)在經(jīng)治療之后可繼續(xù)舒服地生活下去，擺脫癌癥的折磨。在過(guò)去可能會(huì)死去的糖尿病患者，現(xiàn)在也能過(guò)上幾乎正常的生活。即使視力障礙也能通過(guò)激光手術(shù)被有效去除?？傮w而言，人類狀況現(xiàn)在遠(yuǎn)好于一個(gè)多世紀(jì)之前，這似乎應(yīng)是不爭(zhēng)的事實(shí)。 如果從狹義上去理解"progress"和"the condition of humanity"，則人們可以甚為合理地說(shuō)，人類在過(guò)去的一個(gè)多世紀(jì)中幾乎沒(méi)有取得任何進(jìn)步。全球數(shù)以百萬(wàn)計(jì)的人仍生活在貧困之中，愛(ài)滋病正在奪走無(wú)數(shù)人的生命，而治愈方法遙遙無(wú)期。戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)與暴力在中東,非洲以及阿富汗持續(xù)不斷。然則，持此狹隘的觀點(diǎn)則有可能使人無(wú)視人類在過(guò)去一百年中業(yè)已取得的昭然若揭的巨大進(jìn)步。隨著人類繼續(xù)邁進(jìn)21世紀(jì)，較為可取的做法應(yīng)該是，我們應(yīng)充分意識(shí)到在過(guò)去100年中人類業(yè)已取得的全部成就，并展望人類在下一個(gè)世紀(jì)中所可能取得的未來(lái)進(jìn)步，而不是對(duì)人類今日顯著改善的生存狀況視而不見(jiàn)，置若罔聞。
