六級高分作文_進(jìn)與退
進(jìn)與退
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on stepping forward and stepping backward by referring to the saying “You will either step forward into growth, or you will step backward into safety .” You can cite examples to illustrate your point. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.
審題立意
1. 導(dǎo)語解讀：要求考生根據(jù) “要么前進(jìn)收獲成長，要么后退得保平安”這句話，寫一篇關(guān)于“進(jìn)與退”的文章，可以舉例說明。
2. 文章立意：人生如逆水行舟，不進(jìn)則退。如果你勇往直前，成功就在前方等著你。如果你退后到自己的安樂窩，那么你就沒有任何成功的機(jī)會。
寫作思路
1. 開篇段落直接指明，人生中沒有其他選擇，只有前進(jìn)或者后退。
2. 主體段落分別從前進(jìn)及后退兩方面展開論述，為人們指明方向。
3. 結(jié)尾段落繼續(xù)從前進(jìn)及后退兩方面呼應(yīng)首段，對首段的主題作進(jìn)一步深化。
參考范文
There are no excessive choices for us to live in the world: either step forward into growth, or step backward into safety. 1
We may face all kinds of difficulties unexpectedly in the process of advancing. We may also confront frustration and failure. However, these experiences are valuable assets for us, which will enrich our experience, improve our ability, help us grow and lead us to success eventually. 2
If we choose stepping backward, we can get to safety; however, this is transitory. Although we don’t need to meet difficulties and challenges actively, we have to make effort just to keep the temporary safety within the development of the society. Just as the truth that “In the future, the only constant is change. If you don’t change, you will be washed out by the constantly changing future”, told in the book Who Moved My Cheese ? 3
In a word, life is like sailing against the current: either you keep forging ahead or you keep falling behind. If you advance bravely, the success is just around the corner waiting for you. If you draw back to your cosy nest, you won’t have any chance to succeed. 4
我們生活于這個世界，要么前進(jìn)收獲成長，要么后退得保平安，除此之外，別無選擇。
在前進(jìn)的過程中，我們可能會遇到各種意想不到的困難，我們也可能遭受挫折和失敗。但是，這些經(jīng)歷對于我們來說是寶貴的財富。它可以使我們增加經(jīng)驗，使我們增強(qiáng)能力，使我們收獲成長，并最終帶領(lǐng)我們走向成功。
如果我們選擇后退，我們將獲得平安，但是這種平安是暫時的。我們雖不需要主動去面對困難與挑戰(zhàn)，但是隨著社會的發(fā)展即使是為了維持暫時的平安我們也不得不付出努力。正如《誰動了我的奶酪？》一書告訴我們的道理“未來，變化是唯一的不變。不改變，就會被瞬息萬變的未來所淘汰?！?/p>
總而言之，人生如逆水行舟，不進(jìn)則退。如果你勇往直前，成功就在前方等著你。如果你退后到自己的安樂窩，那么你就沒有任何成功的機(jī)會。
范文點評
1. 開篇點題，直截了當(dāng)。
2. 指出前進(jìn)可能會帶來困難和挑戰(zhàn)，但是最終將帶給我們成功。
3. 指出后退可能獲得暫時的平安，但是最終將被淘汰。
4. 結(jié)尾段繼續(xù)從兩方面加以說明，加深主題。
要點用法
excessive adj. 過多的；過分的
unexpectedly adv. 出乎意料地，意外地
confront v. 遭遇；面對
frustration n. 挫折
eventually adv. 最后，終于
transitory adj. 暫時的
constant adj. 不變的
wash out 淘汰
constantly adv. 不斷地
forge ahead 取得進(jìn)展
fall behind 落在后面
cosy nest 安樂窩
句法點評
1. However, these experiences are valuable assets for us, which will enrich our experience, improve our ability, help us grow and lead us to success eventually.
本句中包含which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句，修飾主句的主語these experiences。
2. Although we don’t need to meet difficulties and challenges actively, we have to make effort just to keep the temporary safety within the development of the society.
