六級高分作文_成功需要付出努力

　成功需要付出努力

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the importance of making efforts by commenting on Thomas Hardy’s remark, “I might say that success is won by three things: first, effort; second, more effort; third, still more effort .” You can cite examples to illustrate your point. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

審題立意

1. 導(dǎo)語解讀：要求考生根據(jù)引語的內(nèi)容就“成功需要付出努力”這一話題展開論述。

2. 文章立意：成功是人們經(jīng)過不斷的努力、艱辛的付出后所得到的回報。因此，成功只有靠不斷的努力去獲得。

寫作思路

1. 第一段引入哈代的名言，簡要解釋后提出論點(diǎn)：成功需要付出努力。

2. 第二段用對比論證的方式闡述努力和不努力的兩種后果，揭示只有努力才能取得成功。

3. 第三段具體闡述個人對努力的看法，再次強(qiáng)調(diào)成功需要付出努力。

參考范文

Thomas Hardy once said, “I might say that success is won by three things: first, effort; second, more effort; third, still more effort.” 1 It reveals that the only way to achieve success is to spare no effort. 2 I absolutely agree with it. 3

Everyone tries to achieve success. But some finally make it while others fail. 4 There is no doubt that those who stick to the end through a long period of hard struggles attain their aims while those who are not willing to make more industrious efforts stop halfway and thus cannot achieve success. 4

From my perspective, efforts mean hardwork with more perseverance. 5 Heaven rewards the diligent. We all know “no pains, no gains.” There is no royal road to the summit of success. Without exerting oneself, it is impossible to succeed. Making persistent efforts is like laying bricks one next to another. Only by working with whole-hearted devotion and perseverance can we attain success. Thus, hardwork with more perseverance is the deciding factor to one’s success. 5

托馬斯?哈代曾經(jīng)說過：“我會說成功要靠三件事才能贏得：努力，努力，再努力?！?它告訴我們成功的唯一方式就是全力以赴。我完全同意這一觀點(diǎn)。

人人都試圖獲得成功。不過，一些人最后成功了，而一些人則失敗了。毫無疑問，那些堅(jiān)持自己夢想并經(jīng)過長期努力奮斗撐到最后的人實(shí)現(xiàn)了他們的夢想，而那些不愿意勤奮努力的人只會半途而廢，因此無法取得成功。

我認(rèn)為，努力就是刻苦和更多的毅力。天道酬勤。我們都知道“沒有付出就沒有收獲”。通向成功巔峰的路沒有容易的。不努力是不可能成功的。持續(xù)的努力就像一塊接一塊地搭磚。只有全身心的努力和毅力，我們才能獲得成功。因此，努力工作和更多的毅力是通向成功的決定性因素。

范文點(diǎn)評

1. 開篇引用引語，意在引出本文話題。

2. 揭示引語的寓意，即文章的中心思想：成功的唯一方式就是全力以赴。

3. 首段末句明確表明自己贊同上述觀點(diǎn)。

4. 對比論證觀點(diǎn)：努力的人才會成功，反之就會失敗。

5. 給出個人對努力的理解并加以詳細(xì)闡述。

要點(diǎn)用法

spare no effort 不遺余力

stick to 堅(jiān)持

attain v. 實(shí)現(xiàn)；獲得

industrious adj. 勤勉的

stop halfway 半途而廢

summit n. 頂點(diǎn)

royal road 捷徑；坦途

exerting oneself 努力；盡力

whole-hearted 全心全意的

deciding factor 決定性因素

句法點(diǎn)評

1. There is no doubt that those who stick to the end through a long period of hard struggles attain their aims while those who are not willing to make more industrious efforts stop halfway and thus cannot achieve success.

此處采用了固定句型：There is no doubt that...，意為“毫無疑問，……”，其中that引導(dǎo)同位語從句，后面的those who...while those who...是并列的對比結(jié)構(gòu)，正反對比說明了努力付出和不愿付出的結(jié)果，其中who均引導(dǎo)定語從句。

2. Heaven rewards the diligent.

該句對應(yīng)的中文是“天道酬勤”，平時應(yīng)多注意中文成語的常見譯法。