六級高分作文_健康與財富
健康與財富
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on health and wealth by commenting on the remark, “Health is certainly more valuable than money, because it is by health that money is procured .” You can cite examples to illustrate your point. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.
審題立意
1. 導(dǎo)語解讀：要求考生從評論“健康肯定比金錢更重要，因?yàn)橹挥猩眢w健康你才能獲得金錢”這一引言入手，就“健康與財富”的話題展開論述。
2. 文章立意：有人認(rèn)為健康重要，有人認(rèn)為金錢重要。但兩種觀點(diǎn)都是片面的。對人們來說，健康和財富都必不可少。因此，關(guān)注健康的同時又獲取財富才是明智之舉。
寫作思路
1. 第一段引入引言并闡述其含義：健康比財富更加重要。
2. 第二段論述人們對于健康和財富的不同看法。
3. 第三段表明自己贊成健康更重要的觀點(diǎn)，同時對這一觀點(diǎn)進(jìn)行了補(bǔ)充。
參考范文
“Health is certainly more valuable than money, because it is by health that money is procured.” The remark demonstrates the relationship between health and wealth. Meanwhile, it also indicates that health is more important than wealth. 1
So far as this topic is concerned, different people have different opinions about it. 2 Some insist that health play a more important role in our life. They believe that without good health they may never enjoy themselves even if they have a large fortune. If they want to become wealthy, they must keep healthy. 3 On the contrary, some people see more advantages arising from wealth. They think if they have enough money, they can do whatever they want to do, such as buying a big house, expensive car, or beautiful clothes. 3
As far as I am concerned, I am in favor of the former view that health plays a more important role in our life. 4 However, there is no doubt that money is indispensable for everyone; without money we lose the capital to enjoy life. Therefore, we should attach adequate importance to both health and wealth. 5
“健康肯定比金錢更重要，因?yàn)橹挥猩眢w健康你才能獲得金錢?！边@句話表明了我們健康和財富之間的關(guān)系。同時，它也表明了健康比金錢更加重要。
就這個話題來說，不同的人有著不同的見解。一些人堅持認(rèn)為，健康在我們的生活中發(fā)揮著更重要的作用。他們認(rèn)為，如果沒有健康的身體，即使有大筆財富也永遠(yuǎn)無福消受。如果要變得富有，他們必須保持健康。相反，一些人則更加看重財富的益處。他們認(rèn)為，如果他們有足夠的錢就能做任何想做的事，比如買豪宅、豪車，或是漂亮的衣服。
就我而言，我贊同前一種觀點(diǎn)：在我們的生活中，健康更為重要。然而，毋庸置疑，金錢對于每個人而言也是必不可少的；沒有金錢，我們就失去了享受生活的資本。因此，我們應(yīng)該對健康和財富都給予足夠的重視。
范文點(diǎn)評
1. 開篇簡要評論題目中的引言，同時準(zhǔn)確傳遞出引言的含義：健康比金錢重要。
2. 就健康和財富這一話題展開論述，緊扣作文話題。
3. 闡述兩種相對立的觀點(diǎn)。
4. 明確表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)，表示贊同前一種觀點(diǎn)。
5. 進(jìn)一步補(bǔ)充指出健康和財富二者兼顧的重要性。
要點(diǎn)用法
procure v. 獲得
fortune n. 財富
on the contrary 相反
arise from 起因于
capital n. 資本
adequate adj. 足夠的，充分的
attach importance to 重視
句法點(diǎn)評
1. So far as this topic is concerned, different people have different opinions about it.
此處用到了固定用法：so far as...concerned，意為“就……來說，就……而言”。
2. Some insist that health play a more important role in our life.
此處用到了虛擬語氣，insist后跟that從句時，如果insist表示“堅決主張；堅決要求”時，其后由that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句需用虛擬語氣，從句中的謂語動詞用“should +動詞原形”的形式，should可以省略。
3. However, there is no doubt that money is indispensable for everyone.
本句為There is no doubt that...句型，意為“毫無疑問，毋庸置疑……”。
