Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic How Should College Students Relieve Pressure? You should write at least 150 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1)當(dāng)今的大學(xué)生要面臨很多來(lái)自不同方面的壓力
2)大學(xué)生緩解壓力的方式有…
3)你一般都是如何排解壓力的?
How Should College Students Relieve Pressure?
行文思路
本題屬于提綱式文字命題。提綱第1點(diǎn)指出一個(gè)問(wèn)題，提綱第2點(diǎn)要求說(shuō)明如何解決該問(wèn)題，提綱第3點(diǎn)要求闡述“我”的做法，由此可判斷本文應(yīng)為問(wèn)題解決型作文。
根據(jù)所給提綱，本文應(yīng)包含如下內(nèi)容：指出當(dāng)今的大學(xué)生主要面臨哪些壓力;列舉大學(xué)生緩解壓力的方式;談?wù)?ldquo;我”是采取哪種方式排解壓力的。
高分范文
How Should College Students Relieve Pressure?
Today’s college students face many pressures, mainly from parents’ expectation, study, economy, employment and all kinds of competition. [1]Although pressure to some extent can provide motivation, overdue pressure has a serious negative effect. Pressure can destroy a student’s confidence. [2]More seriously, it might make some students lose control of their emotions and behaviors.
[3]Considering the great damage of overdue pressure, college students should learn to how to relieve pressure. [2]First, we should have a right evaluation of ourselves [4]so as to [5]make use of advantages and avoid disadvantages. [2]Second, we should [6]set a clear aim of a struggle. The aim can give us motivation, and make us become active. [2]Third, [7]attending collective activities is an effective way to relieve pressure. [2]Finally, if you find pressure is nearly [8]beyond your control, you’d better turn to professional psychological guidance.
[2]As to me, my pressure is mainly from future employment. [4]In order to reduce it, I asked my parents help me analyse my advantages and disadvantages, and produce a more practical job objection. [2]So my employment pressure was relieved greatly. Now I become confident in my future, and I [9]do believe I can get an ideal job after my graduation.
【亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評(píng)】
[1]although引導(dǎo)讓步狀語(yǔ)從句。
[2]過(guò)渡銜接詞語(yǔ)，使文章條理清晰、銜接緊密。
[3]“考慮到，鑒于”，介詞。
[4]表示目的。
[5]“揚(yáng)長(zhǎng)避短”。
[6]“設(shè)立一個(gè)明確的奮斗目標(biāo)”。
[7]動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)作主語(yǔ)，用不同于前兩點(diǎn)的句式提出緩解壓力的第三種方式。
[8]“超出…范圍或能力”。
[9]強(qiáng)調(diào)動(dòng)詞believe。
佳句臨摹
1.佳句：Although pressure to some extent can provide motivation, overdue pressure has a serious negative effect.
臨?。罕M管兼職工作能夠帶來(lái)很多好處，但我們不應(yīng)該在它上面花費(fèi)太多的時(shí)間。
2.佳句：Attending collective activities is an effective way to relieve
臨?。簩W(xué)會(huì)如何與人溝通是步入社會(huì)的第一步也是最重要的一步。
3.佳句：In order to reduce it, I asked my parents help me analyse my advantages and disadvantages
臨摹： 為了在激烈的競(jìng)爭(zhēng)中獲得優(yōu)勢(shì)，大學(xué)生們必須全面發(fā)展自己的能力。
【KEY】
1. Although a part-time job does much good to us, we should not spend too much time on it.
2. Learning how to deal with people is the first and the most important step to enter into the society.
3. In order to get their priority in the fierce competition, college students have to develop their abilities in an all-around way.
