例句： You are enthusiastic and enterprising. And you are one of the most talented and diligentin our department. You have already won 2 awards for good academic results. 改句： You, enthusiastic and enterprising,are one of the most talented and diligent in our department,already winning 2 awards for outstanding academic results. 解析：我們可以看到例句中有3個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句，咋看上去給人一種啰嗦、累贅的感覺(jué)。但細(xì)看之下，不難發(fā)現(xiàn)3個(gè)句子的主語(yǔ)全部是you，因此我們就該聯(lián)想到同位語(yǔ)、插入語(yǔ)的應(yīng)用。從改句中，我們可以發(fā)現(xiàn)謂語(yǔ)從原來(lái)的3個(gè)變成了1個(gè)，頓時(shí)使句子顯得高級(jí)，精簡(jiǎn)很多。其次，還有一個(gè)改動(dòng)之處為"good"，這個(gè)詞是常用詞，口語(yǔ)中用的更頻繁些，我們可以想一些同義詞例如"excellent"，"outstanding"等等。 下面請(qǐng)大家試試看吧！ 答案： Depending on his families's support, he found a decent a job, which was despised by one of his friends.
1.He depended on his families's support to find a good job. One of his friends looked downed on him.
